Y07W31PA - Should Student Representatives Have a Formal Vote?

This week you wrote a submission to your school council about student voting rights. Now you'll read another student's submission and decide how strong it is. Looking at someone else's work sharpens what you spot — and gives you moves to use in your own writing.

Part 1

The Assessor Scorecard for

Persuasive – Persuasive submission

Markers look for submissions that take a clear position and show why the council should care. Check each strand below to see what strong work looks like.

Ideas & Content

A clear, definite position — not a vague maybe. Reasoning tied to values the council shares — fairness, better decisions. Objections anticipated and addressed. Evidence the writer has thought the issue through.

  • Position: a clear stance supported by honest reasoning.

Structure & Cohesion

An opening that states the position. Each paragraph develops one main reason. A closing that reinforces the position or calls for action. Structure that guides the reader through your thinking.

  • Logic: reasons that build toward a conclusion.

Audience & Purpose

The council's concerns about fairness and feasibility are addressed. The writer treats council members as authorities with real responsibility. The submission acknowledges their concerns while making its case. Tone shows respect for their authority.

  • Reader: addressing what the council actually cares about.

Language Choices

Specific, measured language — no exaggeration. Phrases like 'students could,' 'shared decision-making.' Concerns from the other side answered, not dismissed. Words that sound thoughtful, not entitled.

  • Tone: measured and respectful, not aggressive or entitled.

Conventions

Correct spelling and grammar build credibility. Sentence variety and clear paragraphing help ideas stand out. Formal tone shows respect for the reader's authority. Clean conventions match a serious submission.

  • Formality: spelling, punctuation, grammar that show careful thought.

Part 2

Today’s Marking Targets

Task in one sentence

Write a submission to your school council arguing for or against giving student representatives a formal vote, supporting your position with reasoning.

Let’s Focus

Two strands matter most this week: Audience & Purpose and Language Choices. Both sides have fair concerns — students are affected by decisions, but also have less experience. Make the strongest case for your side while showing why someone might reasonably disagree.

Audience & Purpose

The council cares about what is fair, effective and right for the school. A strong submission shows why your position serves these values. Acknowledge the other side's fair concerns. The council wants to feel confident in their final decision — help them get there.

What markers scan for

  • Show you understand the council's concerns about fairness and effectiveness.
  • Explain how your position serves those values.
  • Address the strongest objections — don't dodge them.
  • Keep the tone respectful of the council's authority.

Score Bands

  • Basic

    Takes a position but doesn't show awareness of council concerns or other views; may sound entitled.

  • Strong

    Shows clear understanding of the council's concerns; explains how the position serves fairness or effectiveness.

  • Excellent

    Directly addresses likely concerns and shows why the writer's position serves the council's values better than the alternative.

Language Choices

Persuasive language in this setting is measured and specific — not emotional. Instead of 'students deserve to vote,' write 'students are directly affected by assessment policies and would benefit from voting on them.' Use phrases that acknowledge both value and limit: 'while students have important views, the decisions also require…'.

What markers scan for

  • Replace emotional words with measured, specific ones.
  • Support every claim with clear reasoning.
  • Show nuance — name both strengths and limits.
  • Avoid absolute or extreme phrasing.

Score Bands

  • Basic

    Language is vague or emotional; claims may be absolute; may dismiss the other side.

  • Strong

    Language is measured and specific; claims are supported by reasoning; the submission shows nuanced thinking.

  • Excellent

    Language is carefully calibrated; shows respect for fair concerns on both sides while making a persuasive case.

Now read · Student sample

Should Student Representatives Have a Formal Vote?

Year 7 sample · \~250 words

Student sample for assessment

Written by a Year 7 student in Toorak, VIC, Australia.

I am writing to support the proposal to give student representatives a formal vote on school council decisions. While I understand concerns about student experience with institutional decision-making, I believe that students should vote on decisions that directly affect student life, and that this will improve the quality of council decisions. First, student representatives should vote on decisions that directly affect students. When the council considers assessment policies, behaviour rules, or school schedules, students are directly affected. Currently, these decisions are made by adults who may not fully understand how policies impact student learning or wellbeing. Student voices are heard, but not in a way that shapes outcomes. If student representatives had formal votes on issues affecting them, decisions would reflect lived experience rather than assumptions. This is fair. Second, student voting would improve decision-making, not weaken it. Research shows that decisions made with input from affected people are more likely to succeed. A behaviour rule developed with student voices is more likely to be understood and followed. An assessment policy shaped by student input is more likely to actually improve learning. Student representatives do not need extensive experience to recognise good ideas or identify potential problems. They need to participate in the process. I understand the concern that students lack experience with complex institutional decisions. This is true. But the answer is not to exclude students from votes on issues that directly affect them. The answer is to begin building that experience. Students learn responsibility through responsibility. The council has an opportunity to trust students with real voice. I believe that trust would be rewarded. Respectfully, [Student name]