Y07W14PA - Should Community Service Be Compulsory?

This week you wrote a persuasive submission on whether community service should be compulsory at school. Now you'll read another student's submission and decide how strong it is. Looking at someone else's work sharpens what you spot — and gives you moves to use in your own writing.

Part 1

The Assessor Scorecard for

Persuasive – Persuasive submission

Markers look for a clear stance backed by reasons that matter to the reader, with language and structure that make the argument memorable and hard to dismiss.

Ideas & Content

A claim staked clearly and early in the piece. Reasons that are specific, relevant and explained. The other side acknowledged — and answered.

  • Position: is clear and stated early; reasons are specific and logically connected.

Structure & Cohesion

A clear path: position, reasons, alternatives, strong close. Ideas linked naturally from one to the next. No meandering or abrupt endings that lose the reader.

  • Sequence: guides the reader logically from position through reasons to a satisfying close.

Audience & Purpose

Language and tone matched to school leadership as readers. Examples that suit a formal submission, not a chat. A consistent tone from first line to last.

  • Audience-fit: vocabulary, tone and examples match the reader (school leadership) and reinforce persuasive purpose.

Language Choices

Precise verbs and vivid language across the piece. Varied sentence structures that emphasise key points. No cliché, flat phrasing or repeated phrasing.

  • Word-choice: specific, varied and engaging; supports the argument without relying on cliché.

Conventions

Correct spelling, punctuation and grammar throughout. No errors that distract the reader from the case. Control that keeps focus on the argument itself.

  • Technical: spelling, punctuation and grammar are accurate; errors do not distract.

Part 2

Today’s Marking Targets

Task in one sentence

Write a submission to school leadership arguing whether community service should be compulsory, with a clear position and reasons that matter.

Let’s Focus

Two strands matter most this week: Ideas & Content and Language Choices. Strong ideas mean nothing if the language is flat or the argument is hard to follow. Beautiful language can't rescue muddled thinking. Both build your case together.

Ideas & Content

Strong writing this week stakes a clear position and supports it with reasons that are specific and logical. The writer shows they understand the other side and explains why their view is stronger. The piece shows several distinct ideas — not one reason repeated.

What markers scan for

  • A clear position statement the reader can name.
  • At least two reasons, each with real explanation.
  • A sign the writer understands the opposing view.

Score Bands

  • Basic

    Position stated but vague; reasons listed without explanation; no acknowledgement of the other side.

  • Strong

    Clear position with 2-3 supported reasons; the opposing view is mentioned; reasons feel relevant.

  • Excellent

    Strong position with 3+ developed reasons; counterarguments addressed; reasons feel urgent and connected.

Language Choices

Strong writing this week grabs attention through specific word choices and varied sentence rhythms. Generic language ('it would be good') fails to persuade. Look for precise verbs, vivid examples and sentences that vary in length and structure. Weak writing leans on repetition or cliché.

What markers scan for

  • Precise and specific word choices across the piece.
  • Sentences that vary in length and structure.
  • Language that emphasises key ideas — no cliché or filler.

Score Bands

  • Basic

    Language is plain, general or repetitive; sentences follow the same pattern; word choice is limited.

  • Strong

    Generally specific language; some sentence variety; a few vivid choices that strengthen the case.

  • Excellent

    Precise, varied language throughout; strong verbs and detail; sentence rhythm supports persuasive effect.

Now read · Student sample

Should Community Service Be Compulsory?

Year 7 sample · \~250 words

Student sample for assessment

Written by a Year 7 student in Hawthorn, Victoria, Australia.

Community service should be compulsory, but only if we do it properly. Right now, some students volunteer and some don't, and that creates two problems. First, students who volunteer learn things that others miss out on — they develop empathy and see what our community actually needs. Second, it's unfair that only some students get those chances. If community service is required, everyone benefits equally. The main argument against making it compulsory is that forced service loses meaning. People say if you're ordered to help, you're not really choosing, so it doesn't count as genuine. But this ignores something important: once you're actually helping someone — whether you chose to or were asked to — the work matters. A Year 7 student helping at an aged care facility isn't less helpful because the school required it. The resident still gets support. And most students discover they care more than they expected. The second worry is that compulsory service takes time from study. This is fair, but it assumes service is less valuable than extra homework or study blocks. It's not. Learning to contribute to your community, to show up, to work with people different from you — these are skills no test measures. They're also harder to develop alone. Some people will always prefer choice. But community service isn't like choosing a sport or club. It's a responsibility we all share. Making it compulsory says: everyone in this school helps others. That's worth the sacrifice of some study time. It builds a stronger community, not just stronger students.