Y06W15PA - A Proposal for a Whole-School Event

This week you wrote a proposal for a whole-school event. Now you'll read another student's proposal and decide how strong it is. Every module sharpens how you spot clear ideas and practical reasoning.

Part 1

The Assessor Scorecard for

Transactional – Proposal

Markers look for proposals that explain a clear idea and give readers strong reasons to say yes. Check each strand below to see what strong work looks like.

Ideas & Content

A clear picture of what the event actually is. Real reasons it would benefit the school. A plan that sounds doable, not just nice.

  • Clear event description: with realistic justification.

Structure & Cohesion

Opening that introduces the event idea clearly. Benefits that follow the idea step by step. Practical steps that show how it would run.

  • Logical flow from: idea to benefits to practical steps.

Audience & Purpose

Answers the leadership team's likely questions. Shows the event is realistic and worth doing. Thinks about cost, time and benefit for readers.

  • Responsive to the: leadership team's decision-making needs.

Language Choices

Specific words — "collaborative," "skill-building," not "fun." Examples or evidence that back each claim. Clear reasoning, not emotional appeals.

  • Specific language and: clear reasoning.

Conventions

A formal tone that suits a leadership team. Correct punctuation and clear sentence structure. No casual phrases or slips that lower trust.

  • Professional tone and: accurate conventions throughout.

Part 2

Today’s Marking Targets

Task in one sentence

Write a formal proposal for a whole-school event with a clear idea, real benefits and practical steps.

Let’s Focus

Two strands matter most this week: Ideas & Content and Conventions. A clear, well-justified event idea decides if leaders take it seriously. A professional tone and accurate writing decide if the idea sounds credible.

Ideas & Content

Strong writing this week paints a clear picture of the event. It names specific benefits — what students will learn, what skills they'll build, how the school community gains. Vague reasons like "it would be fun" don't win support. Specific benefits make leaders want to say yes.

What markers scan for

  • A clear picture of exactly what the event would be.
  • Specific benefits — skills, learning, community.
  • Practical steps that match real school resources.
  • Reasons that go beyond "it would be fun."

Score Bands

  • Basic

    The event idea is vague and the reasons sound general or unclear.

  • Strong

    The event is clearly described, with specific benefits and realistic steps.

  • Excellent

    The event is vivid and detailed, with compelling benefits and careful planning.

Conventions

Strong writing this week stays formal from start to end. It uses "we propose," not "we should totally have." Punctuation is accurate. Sentences vary so the reading stays clear. When errors creep in or the tone slips into casual, the proposal loses the trust of its readers.

What markers scan for

  • Formal register that suits a leadership team.
  • Accurate spelling and punctuation throughout.
  • Clear, varied sentences that support meaning.
  • One consistent tone, not casual slips.

Score Bands

  • Basic

    The tone shifts between casual and formal, with several errors.

  • Strong

    The tone stays professional and minor errors don't distract the reader.

  • Excellent

    The tone is consistently professional and sentence variety strengthens the writing.

Now read · Student sample

Proposal: A Whole-School Sustainability Project

Year 6 sample · \~250 words

Student sample for assessment

Written by a Year 6 student in Coburg, Victoria, Australia.

We propose the establishment of a month-long Sustainability Project that engages all year levels in learning about, and implementing, sustainable practices at our school. Project Overview Students will work in mixed-year-level teams to identify an area of the school community that could become more sustainable. Possibilities include reducing food waste in the canteen, creating a native plant garden, establishing a recycling program, or improving water conservation. Each team will research their chosen area, design a practical solution, and present their plan to the school leadership. Why This Matters The Sustainability Project achieves three key goals. First, it teaches students real-world problem-solving skills that extend beyond the classroom. Second, it builds collaboration across year levels, strengthening school community. Third, it creates lasting change: solutions implemented by students can continue long after the project ends. Practical Steps 1. Select one staff member as Sustainability Project coordinator 2. Form mixed-year teams (approximately 6 students per team) in Week 1 3. Allocate one period per week for four weeks to research and planning 4. Schedule team presentations to the leadership team in Week 5 5. Vote on which solutions will be implemented, beginning the following term Resources Required The project requires minimal resources: access to research materials (internet), printing costs for presentation materials, and time for planning sessions. The school already has most necessary supplies. The coordinator's role could be managed within existing staffing allocation. Conclusion The Sustainability Project transforms the school community by giving students real agency in creating positive change. It costs little to implement yet produces lasting benefits. We believe this project deserves your support.