Y06W28PA - Should Students Be Allowed to Retake Assessments?

This week you wrote a submission to a school policy committee about retaking assessments. Now you'll read another student's submission and decide how strong it is. Every module sharpens how you spot strong writing.

Part 1

The Assessor Scorecard for

Persuasive – Submission

Markers look for submissions that respect the reader's authority and make a clear case with good reasons. Check each strand below to see what strong work looks like.

Ideas & Content

Reasons that match the decision-maker's interests. Both the benefits and the limits of your view. A case that feels balanced, not one-sided.

  • balanced reasoning that: acknowledges complexity strengthens submissions.

Structure & Cohesion

Formal paragraphs that hold each point. Linking words that guide the reader. An argument that flows in a logical order.

  • formal structure makes: submissions easy to scan.

Audience & Purpose

Formal, respectful tone for someone with authority. Writing that matches the official setting. No casual phrasing.

  • respectful, formal tone: appropriate to official submissions.

Language Choices

Professional words that match the formal setting. No slang or casual phrasing. No overly strong emotional appeals.

  • professional language shows: respect for the process.

Conventions

Correct spelling and punctuation throughout. Proper formatting that respects the reader. A tidy page that protects the writer's credibility.

  • precise writing reflects: professional standards.

Part 2

Today’s Marking Targets

Task in one sentence

Write a submission to a school policy committee arguing for or against letting students retake assessments.

Let’s Focus

Two strands matter most this week: Audience & Purpose and Language Choices. How you address the committee shapes trust. The words you pick decide whether the case sounds measured or overdone.

Audience & Purpose

Strong writing this week respects the committee's authority. Write as if to someone with real power who must balance many concerns. Show you understand that policy decisions are complex. Keep the tone formal and respectful throughout.

What markers scan for

  • Formal language that addresses the committee.
  • A tone that fits an official setting.
  • Words that show policy is complex.
  • No casual phrasing or personal-letter feel.

Score Bands

  • Basic

    Tone slips into casual phrasing; the writer treats it like a personal letter.

  • Strong

    Tone stays formal and respectful; the writer addresses the committee appropriately.

  • Excellent

    Tone is professional throughout; every part reflects respect for the official process.

Language Choices

Strong writing this week uses measured, logical language. Make a clear case without overstating. Avoid emotional pressure or absolute words. Pick precise words that sound confident but restrained. Speak to logic, not strong feeling.

What markers scan for

  • Qualified words like "may" or "could" instead of absolutes.
  • Language that appeals to logic, not emotion.
  • Word choices that sound measured, not excessive.
  • Precise terms that build trust.

Score Bands

  • Basic

    Language slips into absolutes or emotional appeals; word choices overstate the case.

  • Strong

    Language is measured and logical; word choices are precise and fair.

  • Excellent

    Language is carefully chosen; even readers who disagree would respect the argument.

Now read · Student sample

Submission to the Academic Policy Committee: Retaking Assessments

Year 6 sample · \~300 words

Student sample for assessment

Written by a Year 6 student in Toorak, Victoria, Australia.

Dear Committee Members, I am writing to provide input on your review of assessment policy. I recommend that the school allow students to retake assessments under specific conditions. This policy would acknowledge that performance on a single day does not always reflect student understanding, while maintaining academic integrity. Current assessment policy assumes that a student's performance on a test represents their true understanding of the content. However, this assumption does not always hold. A student might perform poorly due to illness, anxiety, or a temporary misunderstanding. A single poor result can damage a student's overall grade and confidence. If the school allowed one retake after a short learning period, students could demonstrate their true knowledge. Permitting retakes would encourage learning rather than memorisation. When students know they can retake, they focus on understanding concepts rather than temporarily remembering facts. They study more thoroughly and ask more questions. This approach supports deeper learning, which is the school's stated goal. Some may argue that retakes are unfair to students who perform well on the first attempt. This concern is legitimate. To address it, the school could limit retakes to one per term and require students to attend a review session with the teacher before retaking. These conditions would make retakes available to students who genuinely need them without giving an unfair advantage. Others might suggest that retakes reduce the importance of assessments and effort. However, research shows that allowing retakes does not reduce effort—it increases it. Students work harder when they know they have a second chance, because the stakes feel more manageable. I respectfully recommend that your committee consider a retake policy with clear limitations. This approach would support student learning while protecting assessment integrity. Thank you for considering this submission. Yours sincerely, A Year 6 student