Y10W25PA - Globalisation and Its Consequences

This week you wrote a three-paragraph explanatory piece about globalisation. Now you'll read another student's piece and judge how strong it is. Working through how assessors evaluate explanatory writing sharpens your ability to apply the same lens to your own work.

Part 1

The Assessor Scorecard for

Explanatory – Explanatory Piece

An effective explanatory piece selects accurate information, organises it clearly and expresses it with precision, so the reader gains genuine understanding. Assessors weigh how well content, structure and language serve that need.

Ideas & Content

The right information chosen and explained with enough depth — not just what, but how and why. Key concepts fully explained, not merely named. No vague or incomplete explanations.

  • Accurate selection: chooses the right information and explains how and why it matters.

Structure & Cohesion

Clear organisation that signals what each section covers and how ideas connect. A clear topic sentence anchoring every paragraph. No topics bleeding across paragraphs or paragraphs the reader must decode.

  • Clear organisation: signals each section’s purpose so the reader can follow without effort.

Audience & Purpose

Writing pitched at the right level — neither over-simplified nor assuming too much prior knowledge. Jargon explained when it is used. Tone neither too casual nor too dense for the intended reader.

  • Ask whether a: reader unfamiliar with the topic would understand each explanation without needing to look anything up.

Language Choices

Precise, subject-specific vocabulary that builds credibility and clarity. Accurate terms used in place of vague or informal language. Technical words chosen over ordinary substitutes.

  • Subject vocabulary: uses accurate terms that build clarity, precision and trust.

Conventions

Accurate spelling and punctuation, especially for technical and proper nouns. Factual content and terminology free of errors that undermine trust. Sentence variety that supports clarity.

  • Technical accuracy: keeps terminology, spelling and sentence control reliable throughout.

Part 2

Today’s Marking Targets

Task in one sentence

Write a three-paragraph explanatory piece covering what globalisation is, its main economic and cultural effects, and the key criticisms of it.

Let’s Focus

Three strands matter most this week: Ideas & Content, Structure & Cohesion and Language Choices. The depth of ideas decides whether globalisation's effects and criticisms are genuinely explained — with mechanism and distribution — or only described. The organisation of the three paragraphs decides whether the reader can follow the explanation. The precision of language decides how clearly the ideas land.

Ideas & Content

Strong writing this week shows Ideas & Content applied consistently — not just in isolated moments. Assessors look for genuine depth that serves this task: globalisation's effects and criticisms explained with real mechanism and distribution, not surface description.

What markers scan for

  • Ideas & Content applied consistently throughout — not only in isolated moments.
  • The specific task and topic visibly shaping how the strand is demonstrated.

Score Bands

  • Basic

    Ideas & Content is present but applied inconsistently or only at a surface level.

  • Strong

    Ideas & Content is applied consistently, with genuine understanding of what this task requires.

  • Excellent

    Ideas & Content is applied with sustained precision throughout, shaped by the specific demands of this task.

Structure & Cohesion

Strong writing this week shows Structure & Cohesion applied consistently — not just in isolated moments. Assessors look for organisation that serves this task: three paragraphs with explicit transitions, so the reader can follow the explanation throughout.

What markers scan for

  • Structure & Cohesion applied consistently throughout — not only in isolated moments.
  • The specific task and topic visibly shaping how the strand is demonstrated.

Score Bands

  • Basic

    Structure & Cohesion is present but applied inconsistently or only at a surface level.

  • Strong

    Structure & Cohesion is applied consistently, with genuine understanding of what this task requires.

  • Excellent

    Structure & Cohesion is applied with sustained precision throughout, shaped by the specific demands of this task.

Language Choices

Strong writing this week shows Language Choices applied consistently — not just in isolated moments. Assessors look for precision that serves this task: subject-specific vocabulary at key explanatory moments, communicating the ideas clearly.

What markers scan for

  • Language Choices applied consistently throughout — not only in isolated moments.
  • The specific task and topic visibly shaping how the strand is demonstrated.

Score Bands

  • Basic

    Language Choices is present but applied inconsistently or only at a surface level.

  • Strong

    Language Choices is applied consistently, with genuine understanding of what this task requires.

  • Excellent

    Language Choices is applied with sustained precision throughout, shaped by the specific demands of this task.

Now read · Student sample

Globalisation and Its Consequences

Year 10 sample · \~300 words

Student sample for assessment

Written by a Year 10 student in Hervey Bay, Queensland, Australia.

Globalisation refers to the increasing interconnection of the world’s economies, societies and cultures through trade, communication, movement of people and the exchange of ideas. It is not a new process — trade across long distances has existed for centuries — but its pace and scope have accelerated dramatically since the late twentieth century, driven by advances in transport technology, digital communication and the liberalisation of trade under agreements such as those administered by the World Trade Organization. The defining feature of contemporary globalisation is the degree to which economic activity has become organised across national boundaries rather than within them. The economic and cultural effects of globalisation are significant and unevenly distributed. Economically, globalisation has contributed to substantial reductions in poverty in countries that have participated actively in global trade, particularly in East and South Asia. At the same time, it has displaced manufacturing industries in wealthier countries, creating economic dislocation in communities whose livelihoods depended on industries that relocated to lower-wage economies. Culturally, globalisation has facilitated the spread of ideas, artistic forms, languages and consumer products across national boundaries, enabling cultural exchange and innovation. It has also raised concerns about the dominance of certain cultural forms — particularly those originating in the United States — and the pressure this creates on smaller cultural traditions. The key criticisms of globalisation concern its distributive effects, its environmental consequences and its implications for national sovereignty. Critics argue that the benefits of globalisation have disproportionately accrued to those who already held capital and the flexibility to deploy it globally, while the costs — job displacement, wage pressure and environmental degradation — have been concentrated among those with less power to manage them. A further criticism concerns environmental costs: globalisation has expanded global production and consumption in ways that have contributed to carbon emissions, resource depletion and supply chain opacity. Defenders of globalisation respond that the alternative — economic nationalism and restricted trade — has historically produced poverty, conflict and reduced innovation.