Structure & Cohesion
Steps in the exact order they must happen.
Words like "First," "Next," "Then," "Finally" between steps.
A reader who never feels lost about what comes next.
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connecting words like: First', 'Next', 'Then', 'Finally' make the sequence crystal clear.
Language Choices
Short, direct sentences a reader can act on.
Action verbs like "chop," "mix," or "heat."
No fancy words that slow understanding.
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imperative verbs ('chop': stir', 'pour') give commands that are quick and easy to follow.
Audience & Purpose
Strong writing this week sounds like a friend explaining the meal. The writer uses "you," picks simple words, and never assumes the reader already knows. The tone is warm and clear, not bossy. A good guide thinks about what the reader needs.
What markers scan for
- Does the writer talk directly to the reader using "you"?
- Does the writer explain why a step matters, not just what to do?
- Does the tone feel friendly, not bossy?
- Would someone new to cooking feel welcomed?
Score Bands
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Basic
The writer knows there's a reader, but the tone slips or words get hard.
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Strong
The writer speaks directly to the reader with simple, friendly words.
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Excellent
The writer thinks ahead to confusion; tone is warm; every sentence considers the reader.
Structure & Cohesion
Strong writing this week walks the reader through steps in the exact order they happen. Linking words like "First," "Next," "Then," and "Finally" mark each move. No jumps back, no missing pieces. The reader should never need to reread to keep up.
What markers scan for
- Does each step build on the one before?
- Do linking words start the instructions?
- Has the writer jumped ahead or circled back?
- Does the flow feel natural and logical?
Score Bands
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Basic
Some steps slip out of order; linking words are missing; the guide feels jumbled.
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Strong
Steps follow a clear, sensible order; linking words guide the reader through each move.
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Excellent
The sequence feels exact; linking words flow naturally; the reader is guided like by an expert.
Student sample for assessment
Written by a Year 6 student in Thornbury, Victoria, Australia.
Toast with avocado is a healthy breakfast that is easy to make. You will need two slices of bread, one ripe avocado, a knife, a plate, butter and salt. If you want, you can also add a squeeze of lemon and black pepper. First, put your bread in the toaster. Set it to medium so the bread is golden but not too dark. While the bread is toasting, cut your avocado in half lengthways and twist the halves apart carefully. Scoop out the soft green part with a spoon and put it on a small plate. Next, your toast should pop up. Take it out and place it on your plate. Spread a thin layer of butter on each slice while it is still warm. The butter helps the avocado stick and adds flavour. Then, use your knife to mash the avocado on the small plate until it is smooth and creamy. You can leave some small lumps if you like it chunky. Spread the mashed avocado evenly on each slice of toast. Make sure you cover the whole slice. Finally, sprinkle a pinch of salt on top of each slice. If you want extra flavour, add a small squeeze of lemon juice and a crack of black pepper. Eat your toast straight away while it is still warm. It tastes best fresh.