Student sample for assessment
Written by a Year 7 student in Bondi, New South Wales, Australia.
I used to think everyone should write the same way, and I got confused when my teachers said my tone was wrong. I wasn't being rude; I was just writing like me. But I've figured out that I actually do change how I write, without always realising it. And once I started noticing it, I could do it on purpose. So here's what I've learned. For a teacher, I write formally. This is obvious, but it means something specific for me. When I'm emailing a teacher, I write: 'Hi [name], I have a question about the assignment.' I start with a greeting. I use actual punctuation. For a friend in a text, I write: 'yo u know that assignment' and I don't worry about capitals or being perfectly clear because they know me and they'll ask if they don't understand. For a family member, it's somewhere in the middle. I'll text my mum 'Can you pick me up at 3?' but I'll email my aunt 'Hi Aunty, I hope you're well. I was wondering if you might have time to help me with something on the weekend.' The difference isn't that I'm being fake; it's that I'm considering who needs what from me. The thing I've noticed is that tone follows audience, and tone changes what words feel right. For a teacher, if I'm disagreeing with something, I write 'I see that perspective, but I would argue that ...' For a friend, I'd say 'that's a bad take, honestly.' I'm not being rude to my friend; I'm being direct because we can handle directness. A stranger I don't know—like if I'm writing to the council or a business—I use 'I' very carefully, because they don't know me and might judge me faster. So I write 'In my view' or 'It appears that' instead of 'I think.' I also notice I change how much I explain. For a teacher, if I'm writing about a book, I explain my thinking step-by-step: 'The author uses this technique because she wants to show this idea, and that matters because ...' For a friend talking about the same book, I might just say 'it made me feel sad' and they'd get it because they know me. For an unknown reader, I'd be very detailed again, like for a teacher. The biggest thing is: I'm not trying to fool anyone or being two-faced. I'm trying to communicate clearly. A formal email to a teacher works because my teacher is busy and needs to understand my question quickly. A casual text to a friend works because she knows me and we have time to figure things out together. Different audiences need different things from my writing, and learning to give them what they need has made me a better writer and a better communicator. So when your teacher says your tone is wrong, they probably don't mean you're a bad writer. They mean you're writing like you would for a friend, but your teacher needs you to write like you would for a stranger they're just meeting. And that's not a character flaw; that's just a skill you're learning. Once you notice you're doing it, you can control it. And then everything gets easier. I still sometimes slip and email a teacher like I'm texting a friend. But I'm catching it more now. And I think that's the real skill—noticing what audience you're writing for, and then making a choice about what they need from you. You've got this.